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Fic: Sense Memory (Gen, PG-13)

Title: Sense Memory
Author: tielan
Recipient: obsessed101
Pairing: gen, team
Rating: PG-13
Prompt: Stories focusing on Sheppard. Gen only and Shep whumpy please. I'd like a team fic.
Summary: His senses tell him who they are, even if he can't quite remember.

Sense Memory

There are hands on his skin.

Not the usual, grasping kind, but gentle hands, tentative as they touch his cheek. He jerks back in automatic reaction, cringing back in his corner of darkness and oblivion.

But even as he does, something in him wants those fingers to reach for him again.

His wish is answered. Rough-palmed hands ease him over onto his back, and the sudden flare of the overhead light blinds eyes accustomed to darkness. Stark shadows loom above him, painful in the vivacity of their outlines, but the negative image is inscribed on the back of his eyelids - shoulders, throat, head, and the loose swing of thick locks, like stiff snakes around a male Medusa.

"What's wrong with him? What'd they do...?" The speaker breaks off, a sharp-drawn breath of horror, then a stream of words in vicious inflections.

Her fingertips - a her not a him - press lightly at the side of his throat for a moment, and he can hear her murmur but the words aren't clear. When he opens his eyelids a crack, the tall shadow still looms, but protectively, with no sense of threat - like there's no hurt in the hands running over his chest, testing ribs, brushing bruises - like there's no harm in the voice that fills his ears, the timbre of anger snapping at the air.

"Sheppard? Can you hear us?"

Another murmur comes as his eyes blink, tears welling at the too-bright light that's only blocked by a long, large hand lifted to shadow his eyes. His clammy skin revels in the tender touch of the hands that help him sit up, his ears strain for the voice that pushes through the prison of his mind.

And he knows who he is, where he is, who they are, why they've come.

end

Comments

( 17 comments — Leave a comment )
(Anonymous)
Dec. 29th, 2009 03:05 pm (UTC)
Short but lovely.
tielan
Jan. 2nd, 2010 12:26 am (UTC)
Thank you!
x_erikah_x
Dec. 29th, 2009 03:14 pm (UTC)
I loved the imagery here. Short and powerful.
tielan
Jan. 2nd, 2010 12:27 am (UTC)
Thank you! I was aiming to write something that would pack a small but effective punch. :)
kriadydragon
Dec. 29th, 2009 08:47 pm (UTC)
That was lovely.
tielan
Jan. 2nd, 2010 12:27 am (UTC)
Thanks!
(Anonymous)
Dec. 30th, 2009 12:20 am (UTC)
team
Sweet team comfort and beautifully poetic. -Diane
tielan
Jan. 2nd, 2010 12:27 am (UTC)
Re: team
Thank you!
obsessed1o1
Dec. 30th, 2009 01:17 am (UTC)
Oh that's lovely. For such a short fic it really does pack in the emotion and that from just descriptions we can tell who is who and just how Sheppard is feeling. Thank you!
tielan
Jan. 2nd, 2010 12:28 am (UTC)
You're welcome! Glad I could help!
writerjc
Dec. 30th, 2009 05:23 am (UTC)
very nice. so much emotion in so few words.
tielan
Jan. 2nd, 2010 12:29 am (UTC)
I'm happy that you liked it.
starry_haze
Jan. 2nd, 2010 12:36 am (UTC)
Oh my gosh, this was written by you, tielan? No wonder I loved it instantly. =) I actually saved it before the reveal and reminded myself that I had to check back later to see who'd written it.

I love this. It really is the best kind of gen for me. I usually like "ship fic" because I love the interaction between two particular characters on the show, and one of my original fears about gen fic was that it would sanitize these interactions and make them all seem platonic, formal, and distant—when in my mind, at least one of those interactions is not platonic. But what I love about the best SGA gen fic is that the love is there; it's just team love—all the characters caring equally for each other.

And since I like subtly written ship fic, I totally read John/Teyla in this anyway (because of Teyla's tender care). =P And I also officially love John&Ronon friendship—which I have your fics mainly to thank. Underneath his exterior, Ronon's a big softie when it comes to his friends, and his protectiveness is a major way he expresses that. Your glimpse of Rodney in this is perfect too; it's so Rodney, talking in panicked tones, asking "obvious" questions.

I really love the sensory experience you created with this; I read the first line and was automatically plunged into darkness. I even almost felt the other senses heightening in order to compensate—really awesome choice of detail here. I feel as though I'm living Sheppard's momentary "blindness"—his limited view of what's happening around him and how everything feels like groping around in the dark.

And perfect ending line! It's so fitting that Sheppard doesn't need to identify anyone by name here; he just knows and so do we. Lovely work, once again.
linziday
Jan. 2nd, 2010 01:26 am (UTC)
Wow. I want more!
ninja007
Jan. 2nd, 2010 04:19 am (UTC)
As usual, very well written!

Succinct, but perfect.

Lovely!

Thank you!
dragonladyk
Jan. 7th, 2010 09:29 pm (UTC)
Wow.

DragonLady
hajimebassaidai
May. 2nd, 2010 08:21 pm (UTC)
Love that you can tell who each person involved is by just a few hints. John, and us, recognise his team by these few parse actions and he's safe again!
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