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Title: Never Quite What You Expect
Author: propinquitine
Recipient: monanotlisa
Pairing: John/Rodney
Rating: PG
Word Count: ~7400
Author's Notes: I threw a number of monanotlisa's requests at the wall, and "twisted cliches", "banter", and "humor" stuck the fastest. Hope you enjoy it!
Major thanks to M. and winkingstar as always for cheerleading and betaing down to the wire.
Summary: The problem with most of the ways it could happen is that the scenarios aren't nearly awkward enough.

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mayachain
Dec. 23rd, 2009 12:08 pm (UTC)
I loved all the opportunities not seized, and the awkwardsness in the end!
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 01:20 am (UTC)
My story outline for that part just read "as much awkwardness as possible". I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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(Anonymous)
Dec. 24th, 2009 05:18 pm (UTC)
Re: Sorry for responding so late, had surgery!
Oh, you poor thing, I hope your recovery is going as well as possible! I'm so glad this could provide a little bit of a diversion, and it makes me positively gleeful to know you enjoyed it. \o/ Happy holidays!
omglawdork
Dec. 23rd, 2009 03:24 pm (UTC)
Trufax, I think this just rocketed to my top ten John/Rodney fics ever. Seriously. I love how it's honest (sometimes brutally so) about who they are and how they work and how that would intersect in sometimes extremely awkward (and hilarious and adorable) ways. Love it, love it, love it.
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 01:42 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you so much, that's such a nice compliment! I did have fun taking a fresh look at how some of these scenarios might play out. I'm glad you liked it!
sheafrotherdon
Dec. 23rd, 2009 03:41 pm (UTC)
I love this! I LOVE that it pokes gentle fun at so many beloved tropes, and that the guys are so fantastically inept even when they do realize what's hovering between them. The banter was spot-on, and I laughed out loud at Rodney's sleep-deprived laser love :D YAY!
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 01:47 am (UTC)
Thanks so much! I've read , written, and loved many of these tropes, but it was such fun to take them apart a bit and add in more awkwardness. :-) I'm glad you liked the result!
snarryfool
Dec. 23rd, 2009 06:21 pm (UTC)
Oh, God, how I love Rodney realizing too late what's just come out of his mouth:

"'That you want us to live together, and then I'll try to bring someone home but instead she'll get weirded out and leave I'll be . . . frustrated, and it'll end just like it did in grad school, with me and my roommate helping each oth-- oh,' Rodney stopped, eyes bugging out."

Also: love the romantic shoe-vomiting and air-freshener threatening and general dorky inarticulateness. What great dialogue you write!
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 01:52 am (UTC)
Thank you very much! It's always a relief to hear that the dialogue and things that sound funny in my head also work for other people. :-) Glad you liked it!
alizarin_nyc
Dec. 23rd, 2009 08:03 pm (UTC)
Genius, absolute genius.

I can't keep myself from gaying up your asexual retirement plan.

Ha ha ha, OMG, many LOLs in this. Well done, and perfect for mona ;)
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 01:54 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! Glad I could make you laugh!
chkc
Dec. 23rd, 2009 08:24 pm (UTC)
Heeeee! This story is so fun and adorable and happy-making. :D There's Ronon and Teyla and Woolsey! \o/ I love all the scenarios that could happen, but didn't. (Your summary is totally awesome.) I also love how unromantic their daily lives are: paper work, making bad first impressions on foreign dignitaries, having an awkward conversation with Teyla to avoid an awkward conversation with Rodney... :)
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 02:06 am (UTC)
Thank you very much! I definitely had a good time writing this unromantic romance. :D I'm so glad you liked it!
less_star
Dec. 23rd, 2009 11:43 pm (UTC)
Ok, this is adorable and so them!
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 02:07 am (UTC)
Thank you! :D
raincitygirl
Dec. 24th, 2009 12:01 am (UTC)
Aaaaaaawwwwwww, so cute!
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 02:08 am (UTC)
Thanks very much!
panisdead
Dec. 24th, 2009 03:09 am (UTC)
Hee! Very cute.
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 02:10 am (UTC)
Thank you!
dogeared
Dec. 24th, 2009 03:17 am (UTC)
Oh oh, they are so awkward and bad at things, and this is just delightful and so THEM! Oh what a great story—I love it lots. :D
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 02:12 am (UTC)
Oh, yay, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks very much!
scarlettandblue
Dec. 24th, 2009 10:01 am (UTC)
So funny
And what fun subverting all the lovley cliches

And for Rodney besotted with his giant laser I can only say thank you he is absolutely deliciously himself.

Then the total perfection of this
But for that to be true, you would've realized well before you joined the military and would have basically had to . . . to . . . be horribly repressing yourself all this time, oh my god, it is true." Rodney looked at him, amazed. "That is seriously screwed up, but it explains a lot

just as other comments have highlighted, for me this is the essence of John, the truth of his character that just shines out of him from the very first episode. what I adore even more about it is it's so Rodney too, delivering the most appallingly bleak sumation of John's life so far in a way that still makes me smile :-) That's genius
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 02:18 am (UTC)
Thank you! I had a great time going through the various clichés and having fun with them (while still keeping some -- like John being horribly repressed -- intact ;-). I'm glad to hear that the characterization worked for you!
luthien
Dec. 24th, 2009 10:39 am (UTC)
Awwww, this is just lovely. So many great details and pitch perfect dialogue. You captured them perfectly!
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 02:22 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you! That's lovely to hear. :-) I'm glad you enjoyed it!
perfica
Dec. 24th, 2009 11:57 pm (UTC)
This was wonderful, Santa! How fantastic that Teyla, for once, was like, "Dude, sort out your own business. I don't obsess over your relationships. Man up!"
propinquitine
Jan. 10th, 2010 02:27 am (UTC)
Teyla has a lot going on, she's kinda busy with her own life! :D I'm glad you liked this!
semielliptical
Dec. 25th, 2009 03:15 am (UTC)
Oh, I *love* this story! I love all of the cliches that don't happen, and Teyla's line "Are you trying to manufacture situations to push the two of you together, so that you can avoid discussing your emotions with him?". And that you make John talk about his feelings (sort of) before he gets to finally kiss Rodney. They are definitely "good weird", together.
propinquitine
Jan. 11th, 2010 12:57 am (UTC)
Thanks so much! I just can't resist John awkwardly not-talking about his feelings. :-) Glad you liked it!
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